‘listen pOET there is a bird at the End of this Table’ (barnwood, jan 2009)—reflects 2008 style; poem about poetry; influence from whitman; literal statements that are ‘inspiring’ / 'empowering.' i still like some of the lines, i think, but it also feels cliché. ‘The bird is wonderful’
‘The pOET is amung ships of Night’ (barnwood, jan 2009)—originally from a long poem about poets; reflects 2008 style; influence from whitman; literal, 'empowering.' ‘open This rAIN’
‘express / the /birds / if you can’ (central review [print], nov 2009; then blog + etsy)—first use of scissors/gluestick for a poem; includes background text from old poems, journal entries. ‘Might as well take a shower’
‘from “The random walk”’ sections 2, 3, 4 (temenos, dec 2009)—first time spacing out to the whole page width; themes of ‘liberation’ in the form; multiple voices undermining the ‘i’ speaker; section 4 mentions the ‘selected tweets’ of edgar allan poe (since writing this i found out muumuu house actually publishes selected tweets; seems like the way of the future). ‘wow, you have a smock on’
‘This is the corn shed’ (cricket online review, dec 2009)—originally from the same long poem as ‘The pOET is amung...’; first use of intraword spacing (later here); heavy intentional misspellings. ‘pickingup nickels on a curb This is the night’
‘Champion’ (cricket online review, dec 2009)—two-line poem; pushes whitmanesque voice to the point of comedy, a tone maybe employed again later here
‘it was dark music’ (cricket online review, dec 2009)—formally similar to ‘the random walk’: wide spacing, experimental punctuation; intraword spacing + intentional misspellings; more ambiguous / ‘meaningless’ than 2008 poems; proud of the ending of this poem. ‘my pelvis was a necktie like a bote / oar’
‘from “The random walk”’ sections 9, 13, 16, 18 (hot metal bridge, dec 2009)—more ‘liberation of form' in these: attributing quotes to people who didn’t say them; using bullet points and virgules. ‘Good fucking lord we enjoy the wheat season in michigan’
‘you are good’ (nthposition, dec 2009)—very ‘concise’ love poem; original draft was 5x longer than this. ‘the rain is fast’
‘january, + the torch of sun is huge’ (nthposition, dec 2009)—whitmanesque subject, ‘nature poem’; kind of a sparse tone. ‘i take my hand out of my pocket to feel the wind with it’
